i appreciated it as a poem - great vivid writing.
sorry to be so blunt - i wasn't offended exactly - maybe taken off-guard is more like it.
i admire your way with words.
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We are often troubled, but not crushed;
sometimes in doubt, but never in despair;
there are many enemies, but we are never without a friend;
and though badly hurt at times, we are not destroyed.
- Paul, II Cor 4:8-9