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#80586 - 06/04/05 01:41 PM
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Registered: 05/14/05
Posts: 228
Loc: East Coast
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awesome poem, i really like it.
nyjah
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Every corner, every city
There's a place where life's a little easy
Little Hennessy, laid back and cool
Every hour, cause it's all good
Leave all the stress from the world outside
Every wrong done will be alright
Nothin but peace, love
And street passion, every ghetto needs a thug mansion
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#80588 - 06/04/05 08:32 PM
Re: Remembering
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MaleSurvivor
Registered: 03/28/05
Posts: 2005
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Kev,
Good poem. U have a good way of describing your thoughts and feelings, thats cool.
Maybe I might try a hand at Poetry sometime. Never have done it before.
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I can't come to the phone right now, I am out living my life
*** WoR Retreat Alumni - Alta 2005 ***
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#80589 - 06/04/05 10:31 PM
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MaleSurvivor
Registered: 07/06/04
Posts: 6833
Loc: Stuck between water, air, and ...
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Jim, hey have a go at it, kevs poem is about him hurting and it is good, but it sucks that he has to post stuff like this.
I posted stuff in poetry journals, and they said the grammar is not correct, but I tell them that this is how I write stuff, and correcting grammar takes away the feel of the poem.
I just write stuff on how I felt, and how it was, and I dont correct it, because it is how I am feeling when I post poetry.
Poetry is expression of what is in your mind, so just go for it, and express what you feel and not what you want people to think.
It is about expression and about you, and no other can write from the soul.
ste
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Whoever stole the Sun, put it back and we'll drop all the charges!
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#80590 - 06/06/05 11:14 AM
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MaleSurvivor
Registered: 05/02/05
Posts: 22045
Loc: Carlisle, PA
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That is a searing poem Kevin, and I hate to dilute that remark with further comment. But I know it must hurt and it is good you are here.
Larry
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Nobody living can ever stop me
As I go walking my freedom highway.
Nobody living can make me turn back:
This land was made for you and me. (Woody Guthrie)
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