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#455158 - 11/26/13 08:40 PM Stormy Seas
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Stormy Seas

Amidst the sea’s rage, a chilling wind shrieks,
An endless havoc, this violent storm wreaks;
I cling onto debris – a small piece of wood –
I fight for my life, as any man would…
I fear the wood will crack very soon,
At critical moments most inopportune.
Alas, it was all that was given to me –
My only companion in this lonely sea.
Far away, within the reach of my sight,
Beyond the realms of my constant plight,
An island awaits, which grants me release,
From all this suffering, and promises peace.
The current guides me towards this place,
But stormy seas are what I now face.
Another wave crashes; it hammers me down,
Is this, the time…when I finally drown?
I’m engulfed…submerged…from head to toe,
With nothing but depths of ocean below;
Frantic and desperate, I scream in vain,
My strength and spirits begin to wane.
I swallow some water; I begin to choke,
It’s as if my struggles are simply a joke.
I push, and push, and push to get out,
Kicking my legs and thrashing about;
I finally surface and while gasping for air,
I quietly cry at how things are unfair.
I grab on again to that piece of wood,
And cry for help, as any man would.
I look, front and back, left and then right,
For someone, anyone, who'd help me fight,
Yet everywhere I look, throughout the sea,
There are people, struggling, just like me.
Another wave crashes; it hammers me down,
This time…this time…I just want to drown.
Entrapment, suffering, pain, desolation…
Exhaustion, misery, agony, desperation…
I want to give up; I want to give in;
I feel little energy remaining within.
Will it ever end…is there any cure?
How much more will I have to endure?
By some odd luck, I surface, once more,
My muscles are stiff, aching and sore;
The relentless rain continues to pour,
The menacing thunders continue to roar.
Far away, within the reach of my sight,
Beyond the realms of my constant plight,
I see that island, which grants me release,
From all this suffering, and promises peace.
Yet this time, it looks…a little bit…strange?
Greener and brighter; I sense a little change…
I see things I swear I couldn’t see before –
Trees and mountains, and even the shore.
Then I realize, an encouraging, hopeful truth -
One that's eluded me in all of my youth -
The waves had trapped me in a state of disarray,
But I'm getting closer to that island, every single day.
I grab on again to that piece of wood,
And keep looking yonder, as any man would.
I think to myself, then, “I’ve got to pull through.
For now, this small piece of wood will do."
Maybe there’s a point, a purpose to all this.
Maybe there’s meaning to this whole abyss.
A test, to see if I’m worthy enough;
A test, to show that I really am tough.


Edited by concerned_husky (11/27/13 07:31 AM)
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#455170 - 11/27/13 01:35 AM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
SayItRight Offline
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I dont know what's more amazing: the whole poem together, so many individual lines, the message to me reading it, what it says about you and yourlife... At a loss. A very hopeful and intensely real poem. Thanks for posting it.
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#455171 - 11/27/13 01:51 AM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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Registered: 10/30/12
Posts: 412
Loc: Canada
Thnx Husky ... incredibly insightful ...
and very meaningful to me.
I'm one of those other guys in the water with you.
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#455186 - 11/27/13 07:20 AM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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Thanks guys. Your comments mean a lot to me.

Let's keep up the good fight.
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#455203 - 11/27/13 08:51 AM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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Posts: 422
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Awesome poem Husky. And for the record you are more then worth, and beyond tough. You are gifted and strong, and I'm glad you're my friend. Thanks for posting!
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#455207 - 11/27/13 09:59 AM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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I read it last night and wanted to read it again before posting. Here are some lines that really struck me.

[Yet everywhere I look, throughout the sea,
There are people, struggling, just like me.]

Reminds me how we really are never alone even if we feel that way. Everyone has their stuff they are dealing with not just SA victims.

[Yet this time, it looks…a little bit…strange?
Greener and brighter; I sense a little change…
I see things I swear I couldn’t see before –
Trees and mountains, and even the shore.
Then I realize, an encouraging, hopeful truth -
One that's eluded me in all of my youth -
The waves had trapped me in a state of disarray,
But I'm getting closer to that island, every single day.]

This part is SO COOL! We make progress even when we don't realize it or can see it. Sometimes I guess you just have to hold on and believe better times are coming.

[Maybe there’s a point, a purpose to all this.
Maybe there’s meaning to this whole abyss.
A test, to see if I’m worthy enough;
A test, to show that I really am tough.]

If I were grading you certainly would pass! I think the measure of person is seen by how they deal with adversity. You are doing quite well I think.

Thanks for the poem. I'm printing this one out and keeping it close by.
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#455271 - 11/27/13 05:45 PM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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Thanks again guys. smile

Thought up of two more metaphors today: 1) a ship sailing towards the island, but everyone aboard is in their cabins and they don't notice what's going on outside and 2) everyone struggling in the sea has a light, so that they know where everyone else is, they're all connected and showing each other the way to the island. I might try and integrate them eventually into the poem...
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#455285 - 11/27/13 08:43 PM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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Registered: 09/27/03
Posts: 3342
Loc: O Kanada
omg!

you have described, very well, the horror i went through the day i experienced drowning off the coast of Kho Samui in Thailand.

it got swept out with a rip tide, tossed by huge waves,
lost my mind and my consciousness several times,
but still managed to make it back to the island.
unfortunately i did not even have a piece of wood to cling to.

this ordeal lasted for quite some time,
the sun set and i was force to struggle in pitch black.
if it wasn't for my future wife's voice calling me,
i would never have known what direction to swim.

your poem put me right back there in the water.
this is the paradise in which i nearly died.



for more info about chaweng beach visit http://www.amazingsamui.com/chaweng.htm




cheating death changed my life forever.


any way, your metaphors are more than realistic.
they kicked me into a flashback.
you sure know how to picture and portray it poetically.

have you actually experienced drowning?
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#455392 - 11/28/13 09:52 PM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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Wow VV. Thanks for the comments.

You have so many crazy experiences. I had no idea my poem could trigger someone like that, sorry. I've actually been to Kho Samui (no drowning experience though), but I do know the waves can get pretty intense there...
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#455393 - 11/28/13 10:20 PM Re: Stormy Seas [Re: concerned_husky]
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Registered: 09/27/03
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Loc: O Kanada
no apology necessary.
that was a terrible horrible experience,
but the results were 1000% positive.
i don't mind being reminded.

there is a whole lot more to that story, of course.

i ended up living on that island for about a month.

so you are another farang? (tourist in thailand)
koon pai nai? (where did you go?)

pom poot pasa thai nidnoi. (i speak a little thai language)
song roi khram na ja dai (200 words possibly)
pom pak yu tee nan hok dueng (i lived there six months)
chop mueng thai mak mak. (i like the country very much)
sabai dee. sanuk. (good feelings. fun)
khon thai soi. (beautiful people)
tongkhan klap me. (i want to return)
tae mai mee ngoen. (but not enough money)

kop koon krap! (thank you)
sawasdee! (see ya!)

sorry if this phonetic thai is illegible.
i can speak it, but i can't write it.
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