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#402017 - 06/28/12 06:53 AM
"Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
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Registered: 05/29/12
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I´m kinda new to this poetry stuff so it´s not any masterpiece, compared to all these awesome pieces you guys posted but I´ve tried...
"Sorry Sir" he had to say
when he was standin in your way.
Nobody he ever told
bout the dark secret we hold.
Now he´ll try to tell
bout the little boy who was for sale.
Clients comin every day
with a new sadistic game to play.
Proudly you said "That´s my boy"
when you let him be their toy.
And this naive little boy
did anything to please your evil soul.
Raped, cut, beaten nevermind
you just watched and laughed out loud.
Scared too much to make a sound
just to see his Daddy proud.
When the knife slashed his young skin
salt they put to make him scream.
After they left was your turn
"best for last" in his head still burn.
The fear inside him never shown
not a tear cried till they´re gone.
Bleeding body, tortured soul
House of Horror he called home.
Scared of people now he is
human he learned is the worst beast.
Still despite all you´ve done
he longs to hear "I love you, son."
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Why won't somebody come and save me from this, make it end. I hate what I´ve become, the nightmare´s just begun...-Skillet-
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#402044 - 06/28/12 09:24 AM
Re: "Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
[Re: alex05]
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Registered: 02/07/06
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alex -
you've not only tried - but also succeeded - with great eloquence!
lee
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They have greatly oppressed me from my youth, but they have not gained the victory over me.
Plowmen have plowed my back and made their furrows long.
But the Lord is righteous; he has cut me free from the cords of the wicked.
Psalm 129:2-4
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#402120 - 06/29/12 03:02 AM
Re: "Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
[Re: alex05]
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Registered: 05/29/12
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Loc: nowheresville
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Thanks guys!
I was a bit sceptical bout it first but really helps a LOT to get some heavy things off my chest.
Alex
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Why won't somebody come and save me from this, make it end. I hate what I´ve become, the nightmare´s just begun...-Skillet-
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#402158 - 06/29/12 02:24 PM
Re: "Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
[Re: alex05]
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Registered: 05/29/12
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Thanks buddy.
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Why won't somebody come and save me from this, make it end. I hate what I´ve become, the nightmare´s just begun...-Skillet-
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#402159 - 06/29/12 02:31 PM
Re: "Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
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Registered: 04/17/12
Posts: 351
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you've done a great job and did it with eloquence. Very awesome. Keep sharing. poetry is honestly however you write you. it can't be wrong or right. You did succeed.
Jayy
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I don't want to look back;I just want to start again;Somebody save me--- Pop Evil: Broken and Betrayed
I want justice I want you overthrown;I want courage I want to stand alone;I want your arrogance and I want your pain;I want your everything and I want you dead--- Rev Theory: Justice
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#402165 - 06/29/12 04:57 PM
Re: "Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
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Registered: 05/29/12
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Thanks Jayy, appreciated a lot.
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Why won't somebody come and save me from this, make it end. I hate what I´ve become, the nightmare´s just begun...-Skillet-
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#402190 - 06/30/12 03:21 AM
Re: "Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
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Registered: 11/03/11
Posts: 149
Loc: USA
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What Traveler said -
Extremely eloquent, and very striking. You've more than succeeded. Keep at it, you're doing better with it than you give yourself credit for.
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Matthew
Adapt. Overcome. Survive.
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#402238 - 06/30/12 04:49 PM
Re: "Dear Sir" *warning, I guess*
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Registered: 05/29/12
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Loc: nowheresville
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Thanks a lot!
Alex
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Why won't somebody come and save me from this, make it end. I hate what I´ve become, the nightmare´s just begun...-Skillet-
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