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#362381 - 05/17/11 04:23 AM This Foggy Night
midnight51 Offline
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Loc: Cleveland, Ohio
What am I looking for in a foggy night,
like tonight, where the lights are dimmed
from the distance and the denseness in between?
This place, conjured from otherworldly occasions

where events are exhaled into existence and forgotten
like the slow inhale of a breath being absorbed
into the body; though I am out of body,
standing in the place between the swaying shadows

of a swinging lamp, attempting to connect the dots
from where my body stands to where the light
is its brightest. Yet there are many sources,
like the street lamp, to the passing headlights

and tilted reflectors standing guard,
to the dull shade of puddles standing
beneath my feet. And I am remiss in forcing
one direction for losing sight
of all the denseness of this foggy night.

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#362396 - 05/17/11 08:01 AM Re: This Foggy Night [Re: midnight51]
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My goodness Midnight,

This flowed across my ears as if it were coming from within rather than without. I know these dim nights that exist even during day’s lights where there darkness that covers everything inside. It is then I seek the hardest and like the distractions caused in your poem there are thoughts that try to sway me one way or another so I need to be particularly attentive to my beliefs and actions.

I was particularly struck by your last few lines.


Originally Posted By: midnight51


...... And I am remiss in forcing
one direction for losing sight
of all the denseness of this foggy night.


Yikes that stun. Earlybird



Edited by earlybird (05/17/11 08:01 AM)
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#362400 - 05/17/11 08:17 AM Re: This Foggy Night [Re: midnight51]
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Meant to post to your other poem opps grin



Edited by earlybird (05/17/11 08:19 AM)
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#362402 - 05/17/11 08:22 AM Re: This Foggy Night [Re: earlybird]
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Yes! I am glad you could relate and seemed to have gleaned an astute measure of the feelings I was trying to convey.

Cheers,
Josh

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