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#301611 - 09/04/09 10:21 AM you were there
Ornias Offline


Registered: 08/13/09
Posts: 310
you were there, when i was spit on, yelled at , and sucked into the abyss of verbal assult.
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on, you were there..

you were there when i was told to be a man , told not to cry, told to be tough
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on , you were there...

you were there for the broken bones, bruised skin, fractured skull
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on, you were there..

you were there when you took him into your life, and gave him mine , destroyed my mind
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on, you were there...

you were there when he promised me everything, in my room , under your nose
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on you where there...

but you pretended to see nothing at all


ok yeah so i suck at poetry lol

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#301620 - 09/04/09 11:46 AM Re: you were there [Re: Ornias]
DJsport Offline
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Registered: 02/20/08
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Originally Posted By: Ornias
you were there for the broken bones, bruised skin, fractured skull
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on, you were there..

you were there when you took him into your life, and gave him mine , destroyed my mind
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on, you were there...


Ornias,

This poem speak from your heart, body and soul. WOW - OMG. It is awesome.

I can feel your pain and disappointment.

Peace,
DJ

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#301668 - 09/04/09 05:20 PM Re: you were there [Re: DJsport]
sono Offline
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ornias,

you're quite wrong, that rocks! powerful and skillful use of repetition gives an added sense of what you very sadly experienced repeatedly.

I'm very sorry for the things you have experienced in your short life. I feel I have used the strength I gained by being stronger than the shit I grew up in to good advantage in my life. I wish you the same.

all the best,

sono

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#301678 - 09/04/09 06:25 PM Re: you were there [Re: sono]
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Registered: 07/27/08
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Loc: TEXAS
Hi, ornias,

From my heart and soul, little Pete & big Pete, offer you our.

Compassion,

Understanding, &

Love, unconditionally.

Your poetry is straight from your heart.

It does not suck either.

"I will take that lost boys hand, and i will lead him from the depths of darkness, into the sunshine, forever into eternity.

Heal well my fraternal brothers, heal well.

Litle Pete & big Pete.

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#301827 - 09/05/09 04:16 PM Re: you were there [Re: Ornias]
kerberosesti Offline


Registered: 09/04/09
Posts: 20
Loc: MN
Orinas:

Pretty powerful stuff actually.

Kerberos


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#301828 - 09/05/09 04:18 PM Re: you were there [Re: kerberosesti]
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Registered: 09/04/09
Posts: 20
Loc: MN
Ornias

oops interposed letters for your ID on the previous post.
sorry; my bad


Kerberos


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#301975 - 09/06/09 09:22 PM Re: you were there [Re: Ornias]
Geeders Offline
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Registered: 09/03/08
Posts: 1901
Loc: Peterborough, Ontario, Canada
when i looked up from the floor i collapsed on you where there...

And WE will be here to help you stand up, step up, to be strong, to be wise, and to be you.

Your brothers await to assist you. Just say when.

Jim

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#304091 - 09/24/09 10:41 PM Re: you were there [Re: Ornias]
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Registered: 02/02/09
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Loc: NM
Ornias...i dont think this sucks, rather i like the fact that the view from the floor is so truthful so sobering. thanks for opening my own eyes...nomansanisland

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#304127 - 09/25/09 02:04 AM Re: you were there [Re: nomansanisland]
Anarion Cti Offline
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Registered: 03/23/09
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Loc: Eastern US
I agree with all the others. This is good poetry, Ornias.

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#304240 - 09/25/09 10:32 PM Re: you were there [Re: Anarion Cti]
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Registered: 04/18/03
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Loc: PA
You don't suck at poetry it captures the essence of what was there. Not all poetry has to rhyme, but it does have to have a spirit to it which this has, this is very well written.

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