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#263516 - 11/23/08 10:08 PM poem 24
dark empathy Offline
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Registered: 11/26/07
Posts: 2024
Loc: durham, north england
You look for clarity, as you walk the edge of void,
old darkness beckons at each step,

You ask for charity, for a thing that's not destroyed,
A begger climbing from the depths.

You give appology, for a crime that you perceive,
And yet your punishment persists,

You lose chronology, and yet time cannot decieve,
the healed scars that mark your wrists.

You seak for surety, like a foothold on the path,
As quicksandss cling at every pace,

You stil see purity, as a light that gives you strength,
As a point of safety in the chase.

You use a melody, as a mirror and an aid,
A staff of glass on which you lean,

You find a remedy, in a moment of thought laid,
Of desire and a single fulfilled dream.

You seak progression, with your learning and your pain,
up the road and spiral that you run,

You fear regression, and of turning back again,
yet you know know battle's ever won.

Ask a question, get an answer,
for you are no necromancer,
Yet in tombs of blackest dreaming,
find a word in thought and seeming.
Face the dawning, think on light,
Feel the burning from behind,
Turn to face it, feel the pain,
turn once more, and turn again.


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#263531 - 11/23/08 10:29 PM Re: poem 24 [Re: dark empathy]
roadrunner Offline
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Registered: 05/02/05
Posts: 22045
Loc: Carlisle, PA
Nice, Luke. I like the part comparing a melody to a "staff of glass" and viewing it as a "mirror and an aid". Are your poems your melodies?

Much love,
Larry

_________________________
Nobody living can ever stop me
As I go walking my freedom highway.
Nobody living can make me turn back:
This land was made for you and me.
(Woody Guthrie)

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#263547 - 11/23/08 11:13 PM Re: poem 24 [Re: roadrunner]
dark empathy Offline
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Registered: 11/26/07
Posts: 2024
Loc: durham, north england
Thanks larry. To be honest the word should have been memory not melody, ---- but I couldn't think of any three silable words that rhymed with it and would sute the next line.

this one is very much the way I've been feeling lately, that on the one hand things are going really well, ----- but on the other all the old stuf is stil there everytime I turn round, ---- though not perhaps as damaging as it was.

I've actually been trying to word this one sinse last tuesday, ---- but just couldn't get it out until now (usual midnight inspiration I suppose).


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#263625 - 11/24/08 04:36 PM Re: poem 24 [Re: dark empathy]
roadrunner Offline
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Registered: 05/02/05
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Loc: Carlisle, PA
Luke,

You're so right about midnight inspiration. When I am working on a poem I usually find that the best ones, and the best wording, are those that just come to me when I'm not really even thinking about the poem.

Much love,
Larry

_________________________
Nobody living can ever stop me
As I go walking my freedom highway.
Nobody living can make me turn back:
This land was made for you and me.
(Woody Guthrie)

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