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#197190 - 12/30/07 02:08 AM TIme Bomb
Cement Offline
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Never beaten by parents dead to me,
not forced into battle so early
that synapses, burnt from overload
fired into separate beings.

I only kick in my sleep
and I have never flashed back,
except once.
My stitches are hidden,

inconsequential to most -
but my marks, like a grenade,
will take me out
if improperly handled.

Maybe I need a more
colorful explosion?
Should a city go
up in flame?

Kenny ripped the paper off the package
and unwound the gray fuses,
intertwined like possibilities
lost, possibilities arriving.

Ignited from some secret source,
the possibilities evaporated
in tiny white showers of light
but he held on, and

It blew his finger off.
I can still hear him laughing
right before the scream.


_________________________
And let the darkness fear our light.

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#197239 - 12/30/07 09:53 AM Re: TIme Bomb [Re: Cement]
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James,

Nice poem - is this your first time in the poetry forum? And I wonder if you have an answer for your question:

Originally Posted By: Cement

Maybe I need a more
colorful explosion?


Much love,
Larry

_________________________
Nobody living can ever stop me
As I go walking my freedom highway.
Nobody living can make me turn back:
This land was made for you and me.
(Woody Guthrie)

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#197407 - 12/31/07 03:03 PM Re: TIme Bomb [Re: roadrunner]
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Thanks...both of the poems I posted are reposts, actually, slightly edited from the first time I posted them years ago.

I am going to answer your question about my question with a question. \:\)

Do you think the question needs an answer?

Peace,
James

_________________________
And let the darkness fear our light.

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#197427 - 12/31/07 04:51 PM Re: TIme Bomb [Re: Cement]
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James,

Originally Posted By: Cement
I am going to answer your question about my question with a question. \:\)

Do you think the question needs an answer?


Yes, even if you think the answer is obvious. Even obvious answers can become complicated once we try writing them down. ;\)

Much love,
Larry

_________________________
Nobody living can ever stop me
As I go walking my freedom highway.
Nobody living can make me turn back:
This land was made for you and me.
(Woody Guthrie)

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#197491 - 12/31/07 11:46 PM Re: TIme Bomb [Re: roadrunner]
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I feel pretty strongly that the purpose of any artistic endeavor is to capture a moment in a way that makes it real for the audience, but unique to each individual (including the author/composer/creator). To this end, I find that to try to find (or elucidate) a "true" meaning somewhat defeats the artistic notion.

If I were to say, "I wrote that line to express that I felt like my trauma was less colorful, less valid than the trauma of other survivors" wouldn't I be placing my authorial intent qualitatively above the reaction of those who read the line? Am I not silencing others' (perfectly valid and possibly contradictory) interpretation of that line if I try to suggest that there is a (more or less) correct way to read the poem?

To answer you most directly, I hope that the question(s) offered in the poem prompt(s) readers to consider their own experiences in some interesting, engaging way.

If I can achieve that with words I write, then I feel that I have succeeded.

_________________________
And let the darkness fear our light.

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#197942 - 01/04/08 07:10 PM Re: TIme Bomb [Re: Cement]
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James,

I think that's the mark of the success of any artistic effort: its ability to engage and interest others, and perhaps to help them see something in themselves.

Much love,
Larry

_________________________
Nobody living can ever stop me
As I go walking my freedom highway.
Nobody living can make me turn back:
This land was made for you and me.
(Woody Guthrie)

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